Recount Writing-At the Pools

I am learning to make my writing more interesting for my readers.
This is the published copy of my writing

On Saturday afternoon I went to the pools
with my super aunty and cousin and brothers,
to have a swim with my brother Lebron. 
First, I played splashes with my best cousin.
Then I asked my mum if we could go to the park,
and she said, “yes”. “Come on mum,
we want to go to the park.”

Me and my cousin played on the monkey bars. 
After that, I got a giant ice-cream from my mum. 
Next, we went to Mc Donalds and I got a Happy Meal.  

Finally, I went home to watch a movie. 
I felt amazing because I jumped into the pool
in the deep end.  It was fun.